The diagram below gives information about the number of parcels delivered by two major mail services companies from 1920 to 2000.

The diagram below gives information about

the number of parcels delivered by two

major mail services companies from 1920

to 2000.
The graph shows how many parcels were delivered by two main companies ,namely TNT and
Fedex
between 1920 and 2000.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there were considerable increases in the number of parcels delivered by both companies .
Additionally
, it is
also
worth mentioning that TNT was the largest sector and the
figure
overtook that of
FedEx
at the end
,despite being the smallest point at the beginning.
Initially
, in 1920,
FedEx
was the most dominant mail company in delivering parcels with 15.000. After rising sharply to 20.000 during the first 20 years,the
figure
fell briefly to around 12,500 in 1950.The
figure
,
however
, started to improve again with slight fluctuations and had reached well below 20.000 by the
last
year. Turning to the latter, the
figure
was quite opposite to the tendency of the
Fedex
company .The
figure
for TNT stood out as the smallest sector ,
on the other hand
, accounted for 5.000 in the first year
then
quintupled
at the end
of the period before remaining stable at approximately 11.000 between 1960 and 1980.
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