The table below describes water usage for 3 different purposes in 6 countries in 2003.

The table below describes water usage for 3 different purposes in 6 countries in 2003.
The table compares the consumption rate of
water
in domestic,
inustrial
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industrial
and
agricultur
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agricultural
in six different
countries
.
Overall
, most
of
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the
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countries
use
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water
for agricultural
reason
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reasons
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with the least usage
in
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for
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Industrial purposes. For
the
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Domastic
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Domestic
reasons
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Canda
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Canada
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and Australia were the only
countries
that
spend
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more than half of the
water
supply.
However
, other
countries
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countries'
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percentage
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percentages
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range from 19-
5
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% in
this
catogory
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category
. on
ther
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the
other hand, Canada and Australia
also
showes
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show
the highest and the lowest
percentage
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percentages
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in the Industrial aspect with 32% and 2%
respecetivly
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respectively
.
Agricultural
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Agriculture
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was the main purpose of
water
usage in most
countries
with
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90%
consuming
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consumption
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rate in
United
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Kingdom, followed by 87% in China and 82% in India.
However
, Canada
showes
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shows
the lowest
percent
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in
this
catogory
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category
with only 5% .
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, countries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • domestic usage
  • industrial usage
  • agricultural usage
  • cubic meters
  • per capita
  • water-intensive industries
  • sustainable water management
  • irrigation practices
  • efficient water use
  • developed vs developing nations
  • water scarcity
  • desalination
  • water footprint
  • resource allocation
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