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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given bar chart indicates that the figures
of
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for
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 electricity
cousumed
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consumed
 and
producted
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produced
 in terms of
top
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the top
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 ten countries - China, the United States, Russia, Japan, India, Canada, French, Brazil, Germany, and Korea.
Overall
, it can be
saw
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seen
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 that the consumption and the
profetion
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profession
 of China
was
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were
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 the highest
in
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of
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 these ten countries. After that, the United
Stateds
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States
 is the second
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most resorces-consumed
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resorces-consumed
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resources-consumed
 country.
In contrast
, Korea consumed the
last
resoures
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resources
 in 2014. Specifically, the number of
electricity's
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electricity
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 production was 5.398
billion
kWh
 in China, which was ten times more than the production of electricity in Korea (485.1
billion
KWh
).
Moreover
, the
amount
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number
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 of resources
producted
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produced
 and consumed in the United States was 4,099
billion
kwh
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kWh
 and 3,866
billion
kWh
 respectively,
That
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Which
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 was
appeoximately
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approximately
 4 times more than the numbers of Russia.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual aspect
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • industrial base
  • population size
  • significant difference
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • electrical energy
  • ranking
  • economic patterns
  • industrial patterns
  • technological advancements
  • disparity
  • industrial development
  • economic capabilities
  • anomalies
  • export
  • import
  • energy efficiency
  • waste
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