Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about leg of sleep?
Several
human
can not sleep well Change to a plural noun
humans
cause
there are several Correct word choice
because
factor
. There are several Change to a plural noun
factors
problem
Change to a plural noun
problems
thay
Correct your spelling
that
people
are
Verb problem
have
difficult
Replace the word
difficulty
to sleep
because they have Change the verb form
sleeping
bad
Correct article usage
a bad
lifestyle
and have Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
depression
. Therefore
, it must to
fix and back to normal life.
The main problem of human Change the verb form
apply
can
not Verb problem
apply
sleep
well is Wrong verb form
sleeping
about
their lifestyle and Change preposition
apply
have
Unnecessary verb
apply
a
Correct article usage
apply
depression
about their work
. They are consumtion
too much caffeine because they have Correct your spelling
consumption
consuming
deadline
to finish their project, so they must Fix the agreement mistake
deadlines
work
overtime. If they do not finish on schedule, they are sacked from their job. For example
, my cousin is one of people
Add an article
the people
that
can not sleep well. He always drinks Correct pronoun usage
who
coffee
everyday
Correct your spelling
every
due
to
he must finish his project which Change preposition
because
it
has Correct pronoun usage
apply
deadline
, so he Add an article
a deadline
feel
Change the verb form
feels
panic
and Replace the word
panicky
depression
. Replace the word
depressed
Therefore
, he can not sleep well every night cause
he drinks too much Correct word choice
because
coffee
and have
Change the verb form
has
depression
of
Change preposition
at
work
.
It has several ways to fix lack
Correct article usage
a lack
sleep
. Change preposition
of sleep
First,
people
can do exercise like running and swimming every day. Second,
they must reduce their consumtion
of Correct your spelling
consumption
coffee
even it
is not easy. Correct word choice
if it
Last
, they must more
calm to face their project. Add a missing verb
be more
For instance
, last
year my sister had lack
sleep, but she Wrong verb form
lacked
sleep
well now because she is gym and Change the verb form
sleeps
reduce
Wrong verb form
has reduced
coffee
. She Correct pronoun usage
her coffee
also
told me that she is more calm to face deadline
of Fix the agreement mistake
deadlines
work
, so she can sleep well now.
To sum up
, several people
can not sleep well because their
lifestyle and Change preposition
of their
depression
of their Correct article usage
the depression
work
, but it could fix and back to normal life.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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