In many countries plastic shopping bags are the main source of rubbish, causing pollution on land and in water, so people think that they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or dis-agree?
Most of the countries globally,
aware
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are aware
about
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that
single
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single-use
use
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plastic
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bags
are the main cause of Use synonyms
environment
problems and stop Replace the word
environmental
to
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using
use
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it
. In fact, Correct pronoun usage
them
i
agree with Change the capitalization
I
this
perspective that Linking Words
plastic
shopping Use synonyms
bags
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leads
to land and Change the verb form
lead
water
pollution and should be banned.
First and Use synonyms
the
foremost, Correct article usage
apply
plastic
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bag
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bags
are
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have been
common
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commonly used
use
by society to bring Use synonyms
any
items for centuries. People Correct quantifier usage
apply
use
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plastic
bag because it is cheap, easy to find, Use synonyms
convinient
and simple. Correct your spelling
convenient
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, Linking Words
this
habit tends to make a bigger matter in the future or even a Linking Words
water
catastrophe if the Use synonyms
plastic
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waste
not well Use synonyms
manage
or recycled. Wrong verb form
managed
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, if every household Linking Words
not
pursue to separate their organic and Change the verb form
does not
did not
non organic
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non-organic
waste
every day, Use synonyms
then
all the Linking Words
waste
will mixed in trash and hard to Use synonyms
managed
. Change the form of the verb
manage
Those all
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All
trash
, sometimes end up in the river Correct article usage
the trash
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then
clog the Correct word choice
and then
water
flow Use synonyms
and
could be Correct word choice
which
the
one of the factor Correct article usage
apply
the
flood disaster happened.
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that the
Secondly
, Linking Words
single
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a single
plastic
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bag
need a hundred years to Fix the agreement mistake
bags
decomposed
by Wrong verb form
decompose
microorganism
and create a mountain of Fix the agreement mistake
microorganisms
plastic
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waste
in Use synonyms
dump
centre. In Correct article usage
the dump
additions
, Fix the agreement mistake
addition
plastic
contains hazardous Use synonyms
chemical
that could harsh our land and impact Fix the agreement mistake
chemicals
to
the quality of soil Change preposition
apply
that
used for Correct pronoun usage
apply
plant
. Because of that, our edible plant can Fix the agreement mistake
plants
contaminate
and dangerous to be eaten by humans. To illustrate, Wrong verb form
be contaminated
crop
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crops
which
cultivated around trash Correct pronoun usage
apply
center
are more vulnerable experience bad growth and Fix the agreement mistake
centers
contaminated
. If Replace the word
contamination
this
vegetable Linking Words
was
consumed it can lead to health Wrong verb form
is
issue
.
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issues
conclusions
, Fix the agreement mistake
conclusion
plastic
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bags
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bag
waste
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are
considered not only Change the verb form
is
cause
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to cause
water
pollution but Use synonyms
also
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assume
to contribute Verb problem
apply
land
contamination. I, Change preposition
to land
therefore
, remain firmly convinced that Linking Words
plastic
Use synonyms
bags
should be not used anymore in the future.Use synonyms
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