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Band 4.5

In many countries plastic shopping bags are the main source of rubbish, causing pollution on land and in water, so people think that they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or dis-agree?

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Most of the countries globally,
aware
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about
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single
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use
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plastic
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bags
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 are the main cause of
environment
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environmental
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 problems and stop
to
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using
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use
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it
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them
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. In fact,
i
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I
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 agree with
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 perspective that
plastic
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 shopping
bags
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leads
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lead
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 to land and
water
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 pollution and should be banned. First and
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foremost,
plastic
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bag
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bags
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are
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have been
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common
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commonly used
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use
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 by society to bring
any
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items for centuries. People
use
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plastic
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 bag because it is cheap, easy to find,
convinient
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convenient
 and simple.
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,
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 habit tends to make a bigger matter in the future or even a
water
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 catastrophe if the
plastic
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waste
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 not well
manage
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managed
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 or recycled.
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, if every household
not
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does not
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 pursue to separate their organic and
non organic
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waste
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 every day,
then
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 all the
waste
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 will mixed in trash and hard to
managed
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.
Those all
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trash
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the trash
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, sometimes end up in the river
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then
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and then
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 clog the
water
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 flow
and
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which
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 could be
the
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apply
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one of the factor
the
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that the
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 flood disaster happened.
Secondly
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,
single
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a single
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plastic
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bag
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bags
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 need a hundred years to
decomposed
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decompose
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 by
microorganism
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microorganisms
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 and create a mountain of
plastic
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waste
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 in
dump
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the dump
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 centre. In
additions
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addition
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,
plastic
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 contains hazardous
chemical
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chemicals
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 that could harsh our land and impact
to
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apply
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the quality of soil
that
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apply
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used for
plant
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plants
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. Because of that, our edible plant can
contaminate
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be contaminated
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 and dangerous to be eaten by humans. To illustrate,
crop
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crops
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which
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cultivated around trash
center
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centers
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 are more vulnerable experience bad growth and
contaminated
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. If
this
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 vegetable
was
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is
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 consumed it can lead to health
issue
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issues
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. In
conclusions
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conclusion
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,
plastic
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bags
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bag
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waste
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are
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is
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 considered not only
cause
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to cause
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water
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 pollution but
also
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assume
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to contribute
land
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to land
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 contamination. I,
therefore
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, remain firmly convinced that
plastic
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bags
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 should be not used anymore in the future.

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