Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with.

Nowadays, many
people
is
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interested in exploring new
things
such
as travelling to new places, eating
variety
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a variety
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of cuisines to
experience
new
things
in their life.
However
, some
people
feels
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that doing activities that
involves
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repetitions are more calming and comfortable for them. In
this
essay, I will try to examine
this
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these
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two behaviours. On the one hand, exploring new
things
they have never done before is a unique
experience
for everyone because it lets you go out of
you
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comfort zone.
Additionally
,
people
that
is
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enthusiastic
on
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about
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searching for new
experience
will have a greater will to adapt to new
things
.
For example
,
people
that have a habit of doing actions that they never have done before has a higher chance
in
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of
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surviving in conditions they have never felt before because of their past
experience
navigating through
difficult
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time.
Thus
, I believe individuals that are brave enough to step out of their comfort zone are going to better
managing
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hard conditions.
On the other hand
,
people
that
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who
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have a habit of
repetitions
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repetition
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are more kin of their work as they are more comfortable doing it.
This
is the result of constant exposure to a certain activity or muscle memory that
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have
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been exposed to them.
As a result
,
this
type of
individuals
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individual
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have
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formed a habit so they have a harder time changing their
everday
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everyday
movement.
For example
, someone
that
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who
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has formed an addiction
toward
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to
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something needs therapy to to get them healed from their
addictions
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such
as gambling or playing games.
Hence
,
things
that are familiar to them could give them more happiness and joy. In conclusion, there
is
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two types of
people
the one that likes to do new
things
and the other one who enjoys the usual
things
.
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