You are planning to go and study English at a school overseas.You would like some information about their courses.Write a letter to the school.In your letter Ask about the school Say what kind of accommodation you want Mention any special requests you have
Dear Sir or Madam,
I'm writing to ask for information about an English university.
Firstly
, I would like to know. I apologize for making my study schedule my daily schedule and I hear you have great things to say about your university. I would be interested to know if I will get a certificate. May I request the university contract price? I heard that you had pork in your food, can it be prevented?
I really want to study there. Are there any bedrooms available for us?
You can contact me on my mobile number which is:+998(90) 124-88-06.
I look forward to receiving a prompt reply.
Your faithfully.
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structure
The logical structure of the letter is somewhat disjointed, which impacts coherence. It is important to clearly separate introductory remarks, questions, and closing statements into distinct paragraphs for improved clarity.
greeting/closing
You provided a greeting and closing, which is good. However, the closing could be enhanced with more formal language and should match the salutation (i.e., 'Yours faithfully' typically follows 'Dear Sir or Madam').
paragraph focus
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea or question to effectively address the task. In your letter, several different topics are merged into single paragraphs, leading to a lack of coherence.
task response
The response to the task was incomplete, as the letter did not fully answer the prompt. More specific queries about the school, accommodation preferences, and details on special requests are necessary.
tone
The tone is somewhat casual for the context. Consider using more formal language and avoid contractions to maintain a suitable tone throughout.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite