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You are not happy with the course you are doing at college and would like to change to a different course. Write a letter to the college director requesting to change your course. You should include details about: what course are you doing now why you are not satisfied with that course what course you would like to change to.

#course #college #change #director
Dear Mr. John Onasis, I am writing to request to
change
 my bachelor's degree enrollment. I am Jennifer Ramos, a have recently joined for
bachelor's
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 degree course in Geography at Ulster
University
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 north campus. My enrollement
has
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 completed
on
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last
 month and during orientation, I
have
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 informed that
course
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 can be changed within 3 months.
Therefore
, I am raising
this
 request to consider
to
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change
 my main subject. The reason for my mind
change
 is that I have compared the syllabuses of Geography and History. I feel history is covering my
intersted
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interest
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Moreover
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 I have discussed with
few
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a few
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 of my friends in the history about the teaching method which is well
suits
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 for my interest. I
am request
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 your kind support to
change
 the course. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Jennifer Ramos
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The transition between ideas should be smooth to achieve a logical flow of information.
coherence cohesion
Greet and close your letter appropriately. While the opening and closing are adequately formal, make sure they match the level of formality expected in your position.
coherence cohesion
Maintain one central idea per paragraph, and use cohesive devices to connect your ideas effectively. Provide more detailed reasoning to your request.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task. Ensure that you elaborate on your reasons for dissatisfaction with the current course and your interest in the new one.
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Adopt a tone that is consistently polite, formal, and appropriate for the context of writing to a college director. Avoid any informality in language.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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