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The bar chart below give information about five countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below give information about five countries spending habits of shopping on consumer goods in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates how
much customer
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many customers
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 utilized buying 6 various items in thousands
pounds
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of pounds
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 string in
Belguim
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Belgium
, Spain, Australia and Britain in 2012.
Overall
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, the majority of items were bought by
British
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the British
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 followed by people from Spain. Both Australia and Belgium members spent
modest
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modestly
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 on shopping.
Initially
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, it is observed that
British
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the British
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 had the highest expenditure of over one hundred and fifty-five thousand pounds
in
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on
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 all items
whereas
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 buyers from Spain who bought outdoor game accessories, makeup and books used approximately £154,000.
Moreover
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, the money spent on console sports, toys and cameras is around £150,000, £158,000 and £155,000 respectively.
In addition
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,
it is clear that
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text books
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textbooks
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,toys and cameras were the best sold in
Austrlia
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Australia
 with the amount of above one hundred and fifty-five thousand
of
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apply
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pounds
while
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 console sport, outside activity accessories, and beauty were the least bought with under £145,000.
Although
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 Belgium
enjoyed
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enjoys
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 shopping,
this
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 country is witnessed as
the
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apply
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modest when it comes
spending
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to spending
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 as compared with others.
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