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The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The table data depicts the amount of
water
usage
 in different five Australian cities. The given
rate
measured
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 by dollar.
Overall
, it can be seen that the cost of
water
have
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is
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the highest
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highest
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the highest
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 amount in Perth
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apply
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and
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it was almost 332
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dollars
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dollar
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dollars
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 per
house hold
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household
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 and the city's
usage
 change per kiloliter over 125 was
highest
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higher
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 than
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in other
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other
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in other
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 cities. Adelaide and Perth cities utilize to change per kiloliter up to 125 KL were 0,42 and these
rate
 same.
Additionally
, we can
seen
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 that
the
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Sydney
have peaked
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has a peak
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 amount
for
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of
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 up to 125 KL and the
consume
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consumption
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 of
water
 in
Sydney
 was 319
dollar
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dollars
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 per
house hold
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household
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. Adelaide and Brisbane follow the
Sydney
usage
 and it
were
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was
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 312$ and 319$.
Furthermore
, the lowest
rate
 was 253$ for Melbourne. The
usage
 change per
over
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apply
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kiloliter in Adelaide,
Sydney
, Brisbane and Melbourne
it
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were
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 1$, 0,98$, 084$ and 0,78$ respectively. In conclusion, the expenditure
of
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on
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the
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water
 in Perth was
top
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the highest
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rate
.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage, rate, sydney with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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