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The graph belows show the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, train or bus between 1970 and 2030.

The graph belows show the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, train or bus between 1970 and 2030.
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The line graph illustrates the figure of the British travelling by
car
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,
bus
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 or
train
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 every day from 1970 to 2030.
Overall
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, the
car
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 is the most popular means of transport for
people
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 in the UK during the period shown
whereas
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 the use of the
bus
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decreases
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 slightly. The number of
people
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 who use the
train
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 increases gradually. In 1970, there were about 5
million
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 individuals going by
car
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while
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bus
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 usage was less frequent (around 4
million
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), and the
train
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 was the least commonly used (under 3
million
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). 40 years later, the number of
people
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 who went by
car
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 and
bus
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 rose steadily and reached a peak of 7
million
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 and 3
million
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 respectively.
By contrast
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,
this
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 period saw a minimal fall in
bus
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 users, from about 4
million
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 to 3
million
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. By 2030, the figure of
people
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 who commute by
car
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 is expected to climb to 9
million
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 and the number of
train
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 users is
also
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 predicted to grow to nearly 5
million
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.
However
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, buses are likely to be the least popular choice for travelling, with only 3
million
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 commuters.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, bus, train, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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