It's important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

It is true that kids should know
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loyal
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. But to learn
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consensus that punishment is necessary to understand and know comparisons between them.
However
, there is no absolute agreement on whether
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is good. Because of
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mental health, and it would maybe connect with bad memories of childhood.
Firstly
, it is well known that children like a white list and the things and words will be copied in that paper and you never can destroy it. What I mean here is that with
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you may demolish psychiatric health.
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the problem,
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the situation.
For example
, when I was a child I never had a punishment, I just listened to huge lectures from parents that
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disagreeable. A good case in point is that my parents only explain that
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thing is not good for me.So, after I realised that
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is not what brings me good.
On the other hand
, it can be argued that many progenitors were raised in the same way and they do what they saw during the growing.
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to say that upbringing is the major thing that will be with the child for whole his life. Take
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USA
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also
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. Owing to
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many courses that helped about 20 thousand families. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into
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in our final analysis we can say that "punishment" is
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evil.In my opinion, they should educate and introduce positive meaning and conduct to develop them to the right guidance,
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their behaviour.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Moral development
  • Positive reinforcement
  • Negative reinforcement
  • Behavioral psychology
  • Disciplinary methods
  • Corporal punishment
  • Psychological effects
  • Authoritative parenting
  • Permissive parenting
  • Behavioural correction
  • Ethical considerations
  • Legal frameworks
  • Cognitive development
  • Social norms
  • Character building
  • Restorative practices
  • Authoritarian approach
  • Constructive criticism
  • Pro-social behavior
  • Conditioning
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