The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts below show the proportions of spending in a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
Overall
, it is
clever
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clear
show examples
that the main proportion of
expenditures
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expenditure
show examples
was
teachers
'
salaries
and the least amount of money was spent on insurance in all three years. Starting with the earliest year, 1981,
teachers
'
salaries
was 40% of
a
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the
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total school spending ,
while
for other workers
salaries
was spent 28%. For
furnitures
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furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
items of furniture
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&
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
show examples
and recourses, like books, was spent 15%. And
the
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The
show examples
least
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lowest
show examples
expenditure on insurance was
spent
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apply
show examples
2% and
this
index
was
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apply
show examples
increased by 1% in 1991. Expenditure for
teachers
'
salaries
and
recources
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resources
increased by 10% and 5% respectively,
while
for other workers'
salaries
and
furnitures
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furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
items of furniture
show examples
showed
decrease
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a decrease
show examples
by
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of
show examples
6% and 10% respectively. In 1991,
teachers
began to be paid 5% less than in the previous decade.
Decrease
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The decrease
show examples
also
can be noticed
on
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in
show examples
the indexes of other workers'
salaries
and
recources
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resources
which
were
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apply
show examples
dropped by 7% and 11% respectively. Expenditure for
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equipment
equipments
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equipment
and insurance showed
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a rise
show examples
rise
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a rise
show examples
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of
show examples
by
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of
show examples
17% and 5%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, salaries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Annual spending
  • Expenditure categories
  • Allocation
  • Trend analysis
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Budget allocation strategy
  • Inflation-adjusted
  • Future implications
  • Educational institutions
  • Technological resources
  • Maintenance and operations
  • Comparative analysis
  • Fiscal management
  • Resource allocation
  • Strategic planning
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