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Money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. Governments could better spend this money on other things to benefit the nation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the contemporary era,
space
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 exploration may have been a
conroversial
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controversial
 topic in some ways. There is a widespread belief that
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 governments do not need to spend money
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space
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 programs as it can be invested in many other necessities. I wholeheartedly agree with
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 statement
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as
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 there are many unresolved issues in today's world, which I am going to explain
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. First and foremost,
space
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 programs cannot play a pivotal role in government policies. It is formally
aknowledged
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acknowledged
 that,
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 problems as poverty, infectious diseases and overpopulation are more important and real
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 than investing funds in
space
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. To be more precise, India's
last
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succeful
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successful
 mission to the Moon in 2023, undeniably, has many benefits for science, but not for the average
indian
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Indian
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 citizen. There are a huge amount of people , who live on the verge of extinction
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 the lack of basic needs,
such
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 as food, medical facilities or deaths from intestinal illnesses.
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, money spent on
space
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 could have
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 benefits. It can boost the economy and lead to technological advancements. All over the globe people suffer from overpopulation, especially in
metropolian
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metropolitan
 areas. It seems that
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 finding a suitable planet in order to colonise it, may be an appropriate solution.
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, an alternative source of energy could be found in
space
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. In conclusion, undoubtedly, developments in science and
space
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 are necessary for
the
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future generations, But for the current situation and aforementioned problems governments have to spend funds
natural
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 problems
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 because many of them have already
solved
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, it
is
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 only needed investments.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • complete waste
  • benefit the nation
  • technological advancements
  • foster
  • international cooperation
  • inspire
  • engage
  • boost the economy
  • long-term benefits
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