In today’s job market it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualifications. To what extant do you agree or disagree?

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For 100 years, academic qualifications have been really important for working, because

older

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the older

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generation has believed,

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that if

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someone has academic

qualification

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qualifications

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, they can choose a great job.

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, I disagree with

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statement, because of some reasons.

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, in our generation, most students still worry about their future after

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, because getting a job is not easy.

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a survey, the number of people

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who cannot get a job where they want to work between 2000 and 2020. And

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, many younger people do regret, why they went to

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to study, because they could not find what they want to do in the future during that time. Some counsellors in

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“

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students are willing to come to have counselling from us, sadly, they do not know themselves.”

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, we can learn easily professional knowledge from

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and

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, Google and social media,

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Instagram or Facebook.

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, the greatest entrepreneurs and founders

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have

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similar statement. A few years ago, Elon

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, the founder of Tesla, was in an interview and an interviewer asked him, what type of person

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does he prefer to hire. And Elon Musk said, “I really do not

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have look at their

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where they graduated or from where they received a degree or master. I just care about their own experience and abilities. And I always ask them, when is the hardest moment and how did you overcome many obstacles and huddles at that time.”

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means, that the greatest people do not force academic applicants and they are obsessed with real ability. And like

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issue could reflect our coming future. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, formal qualification is going to be necessary and that power getting weaker.

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Ensure the introduction directly addresses the question and clearly states an opinion to provide a roadmap for the essay.

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Develop each main point with clear explanations, and support them with specific examples or evidence.

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Work on the cohesiveness of the essay by using a range of linking words and organizing ideas into paragraphs with clear central topics.

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Include a conclusion that summarizes the main points and restates the opinion in a clear manner.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

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