In today’s job market it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualifications. To what extant do you agree or disagree?

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For 100 years, academic qualifications have been really important for working, because

older

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generation has believed,

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that if

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someone has academic

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, they can choose a great job.

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, I disagree with

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statement, because of some reasons.

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, in our generation, most students still worry about their future after

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, because getting a job is not easy.

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a survey, the number of people

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who cannot get a job where they want to work between 2000 and 2020. And

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, many younger people do regret, why they went to

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to study, because they could not find what they want to do in the future during that time. Some counsellors in

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“

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students are willing to come to have counselling from us, sadly, they do not know themselves.”

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, we can learn easily professional knowledge from

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and

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, Google and social media,

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Instagram or Facebook.

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, the greatest entrepreneurs and founders

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have

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similar statement. A few years ago, Elon

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, the founder of Tesla, was in an interview and an interviewer asked him, what type of person

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does he prefer to hire. And Elon Musk said, “I really do not

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have look at their

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where they graduated or from where they received a degree or master. I just care about their own experience and abilities. And I always ask them, when is the hardest moment and how did you overcome many obstacles and huddles at that time.”

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means, that the greatest people do not force academic applicants and they are obsessed with real ability. And like

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issue could reflect our coming future. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, formal qualification is going to be necessary and that power getting weaker.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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