Some people think that an international car-free day is an effective way to reduce air pollution. Others think there are more effective ways to do this. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion
Air
pollution is one of big
problems Add an article
the big
preivailing
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prevailing
in
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apply
the
worldwide. Individuals Correct article usage
apply
concider
that international car-free days are Correct your spelling
consider
effective
rule Add an article
the effective
an effective
of
increasing Change preposition
for
air
quality
; whereas
, other
argue there are other Fix the agreement mistake
others
alternative
. All in all, in my Change the wording
alternatives
opinion
that the international Add the comma(s)
opinion,
car-freedays
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car-free days
car-freeways
is
one of the most Correct subject-verb agreement
are
activities
for reducing air
pollution, while
the crucial think
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thing
are
making Change the verb form
is
habit
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a habit
to take
public transportation and increasing knowledge about Change preposition
of taking
environment
.
Moving for more details, the government should make Add an article
the environment
regulation
for Individuals who Fix the agreement mistake
regulations
stay
in big cities Verb problem
live
use
public transportation for daily Fix the infinitive
to use
activities
. Moreover
, it will be integrated if some stakeholders make a groups
forum discussion and apply rules. Change the noun form
group
For Example
, the Kompas news found that the air
quality
in Jakarta for 4 years increased significanly
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significantly
because
the impact of Add the preposition
because of
regulation
for using Fix the agreement mistake
regulations
train
. Fix the agreement mistake
trains
Thus
, the one benefit of using public transporation
is Correct your spelling
transportation
rise
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the rise
air
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in air
quality
.
On other
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the other
hands
, Individuals should know more about the impact of Fix the agreement mistake
hand
envoironment demage
. Correct your spelling
environmental damage
However
, society, government and local NGO
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NGOs
collabore
to keep Correct your spelling
collaborate
earth
with some Correct article usage
the earth
activities
. In
instance, in Papua, the local government and Local Change preposition
For
NGO
doing Fix the agreement mistake
NGOs
seminar
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seminars
for
how to plant trees. And Change preposition
on
then
, collaborate
with Wrong verb form
collaborating
stalkholder
and doing Correct your spelling
stakeholders
stakeholder
activities
will be warning
people to care about Wrong verb form
warn
environment
.
In conclusion, there are a lot of Add an article
the environment
activities
for reducing air
pollution. However
, using public transportation and increasing knowledge are best
ways Correct article usage
the best
for
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to
rise
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raise
air
quality
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Word Count
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