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Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied.He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live.

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Dear Friend, Subject: Finding a place to live When I was a student at the university,I lived
ina
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in
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the sitra
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sitra
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Sitra
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 airport area.That
manson
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manon
 contains 50 People lived.
This
 town was located in
coimbatore
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Coimbatore
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. In that
manson
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mansion
, Accommodation fully not available.Only rooms are available.Food
have
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has
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 to take from outside the
manson
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mansion
.Outside the
manson
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mansion
Manson
,many hotels are available in
sita
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site
.So If you want to stay in
sitra
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Sitra
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,
this
 kind of
difficulties
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difficulty
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are
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is
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 there.If you
want
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want to
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 stay in
college
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a college
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hostel
,You have to prebook the
hostel
.In
sitra
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Sitra
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,the
manson
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mansion
 is collecting advance amount to stay there.If you want to stay with
you
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your
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 co-students,it will be comfortable with
this
.
While choosing
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Choosing
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 accommodation for staying in
hostelis
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hostels
hostel is
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a hard
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hard
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a hard
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 thing.S you have to join early.You have to choose
correct
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the correct
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 accommodation offer.Here foods are available for
3days
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3 days
.But I
was
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apply
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stayed at
outside
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the outside
an outside
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hostel
.If you want to stay in
college
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a college
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hostel
at
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on
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the
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apply
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campus no need to worry about that.But sometimes
hostel
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the hostel
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 warden will be worse.So
while
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when
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 choosing
hostel
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a hostel
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,if you have luck,you will get
good
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a good
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 warden. Best regards,
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coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks a coherent structure, with a clear introduction and conclusion. The ideas presented need to be organized logically.
coherence cohesion
Please ensure that each paragraph contains a clear main point and that these points are developed with specific details or examples.
task achievement
The task required a response to a friend asking for advice about finding accommodation. Your essay needs to address the task more directly by providing clear and specific advice.
task achievement
Avoid mentioning irrelevant details and focus on providing comprehensive information that relates directly to the enquiry about accommodation.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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