Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?
Yes,Some
people
always telling
stories about living.But Wrong verb form
tell
while
seeing practically,now is the best time
in history
to be living.When the best time
is
happened is difficult to say.I am going through Correct your spelling
it
this
essay by explaining about
now is the best Change preposition
that
time
in history
to be living.
Just I am giving opinion
Add an article
an opinion
about
now is the best Change preposition
that
time
in history
to be living.Nowadays,transport and smartphone
are available.If Fix the agreement mistake
smartphones
people
want to travel for a long distance ,the
bikes,cars,trains and flights are available.Correct article usage
apply
Then
communication purpose lot of phones manufactured with more technology.People
want to live happily with these features.
Some of the well developed
countries have hyperloop technologies.So some Add a hyphen
well-developed
people
want to travel and live with this
feature.Some people
want to live in Correct article usage
the tallest
tallest
buildings in the world.Correct article usage
the tallest
Example
: The Change preposition
For example
world
tallest building is Burj Khalifa.It's located Change noun form
world's
iin
Correct your spelling
in
dubai
,Saudi Arabia.Change the capitalization
Dubai
The
combination of these technologies,some or more Change preposition
With the
people
say that now is the best time
in history
to be living.
When Mahabharat history
happened is
the Unnecessary verb
apply
othertime
in Correct your spelling
other time
history
would be interesting to live in.And
Correct word choice
Also
also
when first
human birth happened that Correct article usage
the first
time
is
Wrong verb form
was
also
inyterested
to live in.During Correct your spelling
interesting
Mahabharat
Correct article usage
the Mahabharat
time
of Yuga,the Sri Krishna birth happened.And lot
of challenges faced by Krishna.In that period of Change the article
a lot
time
,People
was
living happily under Correct subject-verb agreement
were
control
Correct article usage
the control
by
Krishna.
So coming to the point,Which Yuga is not a problemChange preposition
of
.
Change the punctuation
?
People
should always live happily is important
thing.But Add an article
the important
an important
some
cases Change preposition
in some
People
love to live with nature and also
with technologies
.Fix the agreement mistake
technology
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks clear and logical structure, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of ideas. Introduction and conclusion are also not clearly defined and do not effectively frame the discussion.
task achievement
The response partially addresses the task, however, the ideas are not fully developed, and the response lacks clear opinions and explanations. There is a lack of focus on the topic, and the essay drifts to other unrelated subjects, such as the tallest buildings and transport technology which are not directly linked to the notion of 'the best time in history.'
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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