The widespread use of the internet has brought many problems. What do you think are the main problems associated with the use of web? What solutions can you suggest?
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there have been pathways defined to move back to the right track, the latter issue seems quite complicated to solve.
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Furthermore
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, the less space is left for such
cultures. These are not always some ancient tradition that urban people
held, even simple things such
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to the traditions of residents of Africa are fading away as there is no room for them anymore.
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