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In the past, people use to spend their free time better as compared to nowadays. To what extent do you agree.

#people #time
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who was more happy, the present
generation
 or the forefathers. I am of the opinion that
due to
 the evolution and revolution of science and technology,
present
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generation
 seems to be more happy.
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 and
thus
 will lead to a logical conclusion. There are myriad
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reasons why
today
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generation
 is enjoying
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life more but the most preponderant one is that with the advancement of technology, people are blessed with research and innovation of
latest
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 gadgets.
Moreover
, applications are
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 and are
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 vast and fast source of information.
In addition
 to that, using
internet
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 and getting connected globally has become a common activity of the young
generation
. On the other side, in the past, face-to-face communication was the only mode and medium of interaction and communication.
Besides
, manual work was very popular among them. They were more involved in outdoor sports and meeting with people.
Hence
, sources to spend leisure time were limited. In conclusion,
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productivity and happiness
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 increased but people are equally busy.
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