The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in the are of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts shows how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in the are of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts shows how it was distributed.
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This
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table illustrates the source of money which
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(national
government
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, local taxes, and
other
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) as given ,
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the two pie charts depict the spending distribution of the money. Both
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and charts give data from 2017 to 2018 on the police
budget
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in one certain area of Britain. It is clear from
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both that the national
government
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is considered the far most assist to the police
budget
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,
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the
budget
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consumed the most on salaries in general.
According to
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what is shown, the total
budget
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in 2017 at 304
million
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, including the
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which
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175
million
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, and the second most given is local taxes
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about 91
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. The next year the
government
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assist
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rose by about 2
million
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.
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, the
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of
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local taxes increased significantly
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102
million
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,
whereas
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the other sources consistently remained at the same figure
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38
million
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. Regarding
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the expenditure of the
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, in both 2017 and 2018, the salary was spent the most, accounting for 75% and 69% respectively. The technology spending rose by 5% in 2018, and the transport and buildings spending remained at the same figure throughout the two years.
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, we could say that, the
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was the
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on the police
budget
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and the salary came the most consumed of the
budget
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words government, budget, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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