The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in the are of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts shows how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in the are of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts shows how it was distributed.
This
table illustrates the source of money which
listed
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(national
government
, local taxes, and
other
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) as given ,
while
the two pie charts depict the spending distribution of the money. Both
table
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and charts give data from 2017 to 2018 on the police
budget
in one certain area of Britain. It is clear from
the
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both that the national
government
is considered the far most assist to the police
budget
,
while
the
budget
consumed the most on salaries in general.
According to
what is shown, the total
budget
in 2017 at 304
million
, including the
government
which
represent
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175
million
, and the second most given is local taxes
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about 91
million
. The next year the
government
assist
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rose by about 2
million
.
In addition
, the
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of
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local taxes increased significantly
reached
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102
million
,
whereas
the other sources consistently remained at the same figure
by
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38
million
. Regarding
to
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the expenditure of the
budget
, in both 2017 and 2018, the salary was spent the most, accounting for 75% and 69% respectively. The technology spending rose by 5% in 2018, and the transport and buildings spending remained at the same figure throughout the two years.
To sum up
, we could say that, the
government
was the
demanded
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on the police
budget
and the salary came the most consumed of the
budget
.
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