Some people feel that governments should take a large portion of people's salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and schools. Others feel that high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Argument regarding "high
taxes
" is a global subject in the coffee shop. Some
people
support
high
taxes
on their salary and some are not. But there are views from both of the sides. I will share my opinion in the conclusion but before that,
i
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would like to discuss
on
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both
negative
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the negative
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and positive parts.
Firstly
, no government can run a
country
without imposing
taxes
on
people
. All the constructions and developments are executed by
people
's money. The side
who
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that
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supports high
taxes
,
they have
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some specific reasons behind
this
. Namely,
government
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the government
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doesn't impose high
taxes
without any calculation. Definitely, the finance and tax department controls
this
tax rate issue considering the economic condition of the
country
, import-export balance,
comodity
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commodity
needs, development strategies etc.
In addition
,
people
must
support
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the governement
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governement
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government
in any kind of bad situation
of
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the
country
.
Conversely
, everyone expects an honest
geverment
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government
in their
country
. In many
countries
, there are many
corrupted
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governments, who impose high tax rates because of personal interest.
For example
, there are some
countries
in which
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the governement
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governement
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government
plan for different unnecessary projects and make a proposal for funds for external loans or high
taxes
. For that reason, some
people
may not
support
the
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this
in different
countries
.
Moreover
, many
people
do not
support
high
taxes
because they can not see the return properly
in
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for
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their own betterment or
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the country
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country
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country's
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developments
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development
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. Many
governements
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governments
give medical insurance
facility
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facilities
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against
taxes
and
also
education which provides a beautiful
certain
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life to the
citizen
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citizens
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. In conclusion, the issues of high
taxes
may vary in different
countries
. I
support
high
taxes
in several conditions,
namely
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namely,
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return on
taxes
, no corruption, proper development
investements
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investments
etc.
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