Scientists tell us that some activities are good for health and others are bad. Despite knowing that, millions of people still continue doing unhealthy activities. What are the causes and what are the solutions for this

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unhealthy
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scientist
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tell
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that there are two
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in research about
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until
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sick, and
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. The first reason
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in any result of studies.
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anything that they like, until they feel the effect
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their life, good or bad. if they feel good, they will repeat
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not believe in covid-19
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disease
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and said to
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solution to do. So,
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and society have to educate
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about every
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that
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follow, and make them believe
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every notification from
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, or give punishment if they are not cooperative.
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many times, and routine
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. so, they can not
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short
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with
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the
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good
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such
as,
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fast food and less sleep
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night.
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,
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both
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cook
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night. So, the way to reduce
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people
about the risk of
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,
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many
of
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individuals
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habits
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if they know the
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consequences
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there are bad and good
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a bad
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bad activities
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activities
because they think
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it's
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a good thing and
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to
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other source
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, even though it is from professional. And
also
not easy to
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a habit
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life.
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