Opinions on food are changing rapidly and there are many who believe that everyone chould follow a vegetarian diet because it would have a positive impact in our health and the environment. Do you agree or disagree?

Discussion regarding the type of
food
for diet
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is a global
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of all the time. Lots of
community
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communities
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believe in
vegetarian
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a vegetarian
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diet for better health and
environment
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the environment
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. I totally agree
on
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it.
Firstly
, we all know about the positive impacts of
vegetables
and
also
the negative impacts of red
meats
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meat
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. Specifically, our body needs
food
for gaining
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energy which helps us to live &
work
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and work
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. In
this
matter,
first
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question is "
which
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food
is good for our health?". For gaining energy and proper body, we must need
protien
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protein
,
carbo hydrate
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carbohydrate
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etc. There are lots of green
food
with
protien
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protein
.
Similarly
, rice comes from the crops which is a good
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carbohydrate
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. Green
vegetables
which
comes
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from nature,
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very good for metabolism rate and
also
it
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helps
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human
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body for smooth digestion. Natural
food
like spinach helps to maintain
the
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eye performance. Peanut consists of good calorie which is the unit of energy. Potato
also
has good
carbohydrate
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carbohydrates
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which can be replaced by rice.
Additionally
, if we start the morning with lemon juice that helps us
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any kind of gas problem
whole
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day.
Likewise
, some
amount
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of
peanut
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peanuts
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also
provide lots of strength till noon.
In
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the
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lunch,
vegetarian
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the vegetarian
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meal has
huge
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positive impact. For
an
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example, Indian
vegerian
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vegetarian
people like bread, spinach,
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and broccolli
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broccolli
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broccoli
in
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the
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lunch.
On the other hand
,
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consumption
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the consumption
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of
vegetables
will increase
the
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production
of
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it
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which will reduce
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the
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desertification. Authority will focus on more green production that will make our earth more habitable.
Similarly
,
human
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race will live more
rathar
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rather
than having an early greenhouse event. In conclusion,
vegetables
come from mother nature which
have
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the best positive impact on human health and
global
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the global
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environment. We must plant more trees and develop our diet to green
vegetables
.
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present but could be more clearly defined and impactful. The introduction should clearly state your main argument and the conclusion should summarize the key points and restate your view.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents general benefits of a vegetarian diet, but the points need better support through more detailed explanations, evidence, or examples to enhance their persuasiveness.
task achievement
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Specific examples are mentioned yet they remain quite general. Include more specific, real-world examples, statistics, studies, or expert opinions to substantiate your arguments and make them more convincing.

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