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Opinions on food are changing rapidly and there are many who believe that everyone chould follow a vegetarian diet because it would have a positive impact in our health and the environment. Do you agree or disagree?

#food #chould #diet #impact #health #environment
Discussion regarding the type of
food
 for diet
,
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 is a global
topics
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 of all the time. Lots of
community
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communities
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 believe in
vegetarian
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a vegetarian
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 diet for better health and
environment
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the environment
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. I totally agree
on
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 it.
Firstly
, we all know about the positive impacts of
vegetables
 and
also
 the negative impacts of red
meats
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meat
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. Specifically, our body needs
food
for gaining
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to gain
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 energy which helps us to live &
work
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and work
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. In
this
 matter,
first
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 question is "
which
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food
 is good for our health?". For gaining energy and proper body, we must need
protien
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protein
,
carbo hydrate
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carbohydrate
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 etc. There are lots of green
food
 with
protien
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protein
.
Similarly
, rice comes from the crops which is a good
carbo hydrate
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carbohydrate
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. Green
vegetables
 which
comes
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come
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 from nature,
is
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are
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 very good for metabolism rate and
also
it
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helps
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help
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human
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the human
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 body for smooth digestion. Natural
food
 like spinach helps to maintain
the
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eye performance. Peanut consists of good calorie which is the unit of energy. Potato
also
 has good
carbohydrate
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carbohydrates
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 which can be replaced by rice.
Additionally
, if we start the morning with lemon juice that helps us
in
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 any kind of gas problem
whole
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the whole
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 day.
Likewise
, some
amount
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amounts
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 of
peanut
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peanuts
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also
 provide lots of strength till noon.
In
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the
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lunch,
vegetarian
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the vegetarian
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 meal has
huge
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a huge
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 positive impact. For
an
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example, Indian
vegerian
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vegetarian
 people like bread, spinach,
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and broccolli
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broccolli
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broccoli
in
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the
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lunch.
On the other hand
,
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the consumption
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consumption
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the consumption
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 of
vegetables
 will increase
the
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production
of
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it
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which will reduce
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the
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desertification. Authority will focus on more green production that will make our earth more habitable.
Similarly
,
human
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 race will live more
rathar
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rather
 than having an early greenhouse event. In conclusion,
vegetables
 come from mother nature which
have
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has
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 the best positive impact on human health and
global
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the global
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 environment. We must plant more trees and develop our diet to green
vegetables
.
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear logical structure. Paragraphs should have a clear central topic, and the link between ideas within the paragraphs needs strengthening.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present but could be more clearly defined and impactful. The introduction should clearly state your main argument and the conclusion should summarize the key points and restate your view.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents general benefits of a vegetarian diet, but the points need better support through more detailed explanations, evidence, or examples to enhance their persuasiveness.
task achievement
The task has been addressed to some extent, however, your essay should explicitly state your position at the beginning and consistently maintain your stance throughout the essay.
task achievement
The ideas are somewhat clear, but they could be expanded upon to be more comprehensive. It is important to discuss both sides of the argument (even if to refute the opposing view) for a more balanced essay.
task achievement
Specific examples are mentioned yet they remain quite general. Include more specific, real-world examples, statistics, studies, or expert opinions to substantiate your arguments and make them more convincing.
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