The line graph shows information about the salary of three sports received on a yearly basis over a period of 31 years from 1970 to 2000.
The graph shows how much amount of footballers
money
was earned by different sportsmen between 1970 and 2000.
Overall
, it is clear that
there were significant growths in the amount of earnings for each players
. Change to a singular noun
player
Additionally
, it is also
worth mentioning that basketball made up the largest proportion of money
over the shown period
.
Initially
, basketball players earned relatively little money
with around 50.000 dollars
and reached about 250.000 dollars
in the first 10 years.However
, the figure increased rapidly to well below 2.500.000 dollars
and became a new leader at the end
of the period
.
Conversely
, despite being dominant at first,
the remaining sectors,baseball and football players made small
amount of Add an article
a small
money
compared to their counterparts over the given period
.The figure for both baseballers and footballers grew moderately from approximately 200.000 dollars
and 150.000 dollars
to just above 150.000 dollars
and 750.000 dollars
respectively during a 70- year
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70-year
period
before to
the figureChange preposition
apply
Change preposition
for
remaining
unchanged.Wrong verb form
remained
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