You coach an amateur football team. Write a letter to a local school requesting permission to use their facilities and explaining why your team cannot find facilities and explaining why your team cannot find facilities elsewhere. Suggest how this may be arranged so that your team’s training will not interfere with the school’s activities.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am a coach from

Barcelona

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the Barcelona

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team. I am writing

this

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letter

that

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because

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want to get permission

using

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to use

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your

football

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field

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. I already

check

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checked

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your

football

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field

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, and

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thinks

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think

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that it is the best

football

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field

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the

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apply

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this

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town.

Although

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this

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town has a lot of soccer

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Fix the agreement mistake

fields

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field

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fields

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apply

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but

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apply

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the quality is very bad. My player can injured because the ground is not good. I

also

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impress

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impressed

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with the facility like

locker

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the locker

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room because it is very clean and comfortable. If you accept my request to

use

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your

football

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field

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will

use

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evening

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the evening

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. I do not want to

distrub

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disturb

your school activity. I will

use

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around

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from around

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18.00 until 20.00 every evening, but

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will

use

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it at 6.00 morning every weekend. I

also

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keep your locker room and

field

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still tidy, so you do not worry about

this

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. I hope you

accepted

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my request. Thank you very much Yours faithfully, Andrianto Raharja

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Greetings in formal letters should be more specific. Instead of '\

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

163 words

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