You coach an amateur football team. Write a letter to a local school requesting permission to use their facilities and explaining why your team cannot find facilities and explaining why your team cannot find facilities elsewhere. Suggest how this may be arranged so that your team’s training will not interfere with the school’s activities.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am a coach from
Barcelona
team. I am writing Correct article usage
the Barcelona
this
letter that
Correct word choice
because
l
want to get permission using
your Change the verb form
to use
football
field
.
I already check
your Wrong verb form
checked
football
field
, and l
thinks
that it is the best Correct subject-verb agreement
think
football
field
in the
Remove the article
apply
this
town. Although
this
town has a lot of soccer Fix the agreement mistake
fields
field
, Fix the agreement mistake
fields
Correct word choice
apply
but
the quality is very bad. My player can injured because the ground is not good. I Correct word choice
apply
also
impress
with the facility like Change the form of the verb
impressed
locker
room because it is very clean and comfortable.
If you accept my request to Correct article usage
the locker
use
your football
field
, l
will use
it at
Change preposition
in
evening
. I do not want to Correct article usage
the evening
distrub
your school activity. I will Correct your spelling
disturb
use
it around
18.00 until 20.00 every evening, but Change preposition
from around
l
will use
it at 6.00 morning every weekend. I also
keep your locker room and field
still tidy, so you do not worry about this
.
I hope you accepted
my request. Thank you very much
Yours faithfully,
Andrianto RaharjaWrong verb form
accept
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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
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