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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows the US
families
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 who earn five types of
the
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apply
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annual salaries in the three different
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period
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periods
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 of the graph shows.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
huge
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a huge
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 disparity
of
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between
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 earning more than $100000 and less than $ 50000,
while
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 middle salaries of the US
families
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 have
the
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similar details during the 3
period
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 of the graph shows. In 2007, the amount of
the
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US
families
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 who could
only earning
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earn
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 less than 25000
dollar
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dollars
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 and between $25000 and $4999,
which had
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was
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 25
million
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 and approximately 27
million
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 respectively. At the same time, people who can earn more than $100000 was the highest during the three
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period
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periods
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, which had nearly 30
million
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,
then
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this
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 figure fluctuated and peaked at close to 35
million
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 in 2015.
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, during the $ 50000- $ 74999
families
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 remained stable from 2007 to 2015, which had approximately 21
million
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 in
this
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period
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.
In addition
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, annual income between $ 75000 and $ 99999
families
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 almost less than
a
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apply
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half with the highest
families
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, which had close to 15
million
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, around 14
million
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 and 15
million
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 during
this
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period
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shows
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shown
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 in
this
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 graph.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families, period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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