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The chart show requests for information at a tourist office in the United kingdom from january to june

The chart show requests for information at a tourist office in the United kingdom from january to june
#show #requests #information #tourist #office #kingdom #january #june
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The Line graph presented people who inquired about tourist information from a tourist office in the UK between January and
June
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. As can be seen from the given graph, there're upward trends for giving information in
person
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 and by
letter
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.
On the contrary
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, asking for information by
telephone
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 went down during these five months. In January, the way by
letter
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 and
telephone
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, nearly 800 and 900 respectively,are more popular than that in
person
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, around 400. The population of email and
telephone
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 slightly decreased in the
mid
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middle
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 of February
while
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 that in
person
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was
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apply
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gradual rises
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gradually rose
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at
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to
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 around 600 in
this
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 period.
However
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, the figure in
person
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 rapidly grew in
March
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, overweighted that by
letter
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 and
telephone
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 in
March
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 and
finally
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 climbed to its peak at nearly 1900 in
June
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. At the same time, the figure by
telephone
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 remained unchanged in
March
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, started to significantly jump from April and reached its peak at about 1600 in
June
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.Compared with them, the figure by
letter
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 began to decline in
March
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 and plummeted to a low point at nearly 400 in
June
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words june, person, letter, telephone, march with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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