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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it wil lok after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two
layout
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 depict the site of an
airport
at
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current
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 situation in comparison with its future plan for
redevoloping
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redeveloping
developing
.
Overall
 ,as can beseem the animals and
depurtures
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departures
departure
 sections will be unchanged ,but some
substuncial
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substantial
 changes will happen after development.inside and outside of the
airport
 structure. Turning to the future layout,
airport
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the airport
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 cafe will be
transffored
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transformed
transferred
 to
left
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the left
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 side of
departures
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the departures
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 and
check-in
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the check-in
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 location will be moved to another place in
departures
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the departures
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 salon. Apart from that, the arrival segment will be
eqquiped
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equipped
 with
Atm
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ATM
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 systen
as well as
 Carhire,
also
 a shop will be added behind the Security Passport Control. It can be sem that, the number of gates for communing will be increased From 8 to 18.
Besides
 a line will be allocated for sky trong. To
sumup
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sum up
, Some Considerable
alteratins
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alterations
 will happen in
interior
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the interior
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 and outer design of
airport
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the airport
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 and some locations will be built and the main Plan of
airport
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the airport
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 will
experince
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experience
 dramatic changes.
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coherence cohesion
You should ensure your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The ideas presented should flow logically from one to the next. Use linking words to help connect your ideas and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
While an introduction and conclusion are present, they need to be clearer and more defined. The introduction should clearly state what the visuals show, and the conclusion should succinctly summarize the key points of your analysis.
coherence cohesion
Main points need to be more effectively supported by directly referencing the visual materials provided. It is important to make clear and accurate comparisons as required by the task.
task achievement
It is crucial to fully address the task prompt and ensure that a complete response is provided. Clarify and develop your ideas to represent the information accurately. Avoid vague descriptions and ensure that all parts of the task are covered.
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Ideas need to be presented more clearly and comprehensively. Work on further developing your explanations and descriptions of the visual information so the reader gains a full understanding of the changes depicted in the plans.
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Specific examples from the visuals should be used to illustrate and substantiate your points. This will strengthen your response and ensure that it remains both relevant and detailed.

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