The line chart below shows the prevalence of diabetes among adults aged 18 years and older in four different countries (Australia, Canada, India, and South Africa) from 1980 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the prevalence of diabetes among adults aged 18 years and older in four different countries (Australia, Canada, India, and South Africa) from 1980 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph depicts how the
prevelance
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prevalence
of diabetes in people aged 18 years and more. The survey was taken in four different countries: South Africa, India, Canada and Australia
betweeen
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between
1980 and 2021. By and large, all of
countries
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experienced an upward trend
while
Australia had a small fluctuation between 1985 and 1995.
According to
the data,
although
India had
a
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lowest
cases
, 2
cases
, in the beginning, the country considerably rose up to around 14
cases
in 2021.
While
the second smallest
of
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number, 4
cases
, in 1980 was
South
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Africa,
then
the
cases
grew dramatically to 14
cases
in
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the end of
period
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. Moving to the country had more than 4
cases
in the beginning. Canada had the highest number, around 6
cases
in the beginning
then
rose gradually until 2005 before
felt
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for a
while
in 2018 after that stood at 13
in
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the end of
period
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. The
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diabetes prevalence in Australia started from 5 in 1980
then
fluctuated slightly from 1985 to 1995 after that increased moderately to 10 in 2021.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prevalence
  • demographics
  • trend
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • decline
  • steady
  • notable
  • significant
  • comparative analysis
  • percentage
  • rate
  • survey
  • longitudinal study
  • chronic disease
  • healthcare advancements
  • lifestyle changes
  • dietary habits
  • public health initiatives
  • risk factors
  • epidemiology
  • data analysis
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