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The pie charts give information about the world’s forest in five different regions.

The pie charts give information about the world’s forest in five different regions.
#information #world’s #forest #five #regions
The pie charts provide information about the percentages of global
forestry
 in five distinct sectors.
Overall
, it can be seen that
although
,
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Africa
 had the largest portion of the forest,
however
, it
timber
were
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 the least.
In addition
, the majority of the
world
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forestry
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forests
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 were
North
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America
as well as
Africa
.
While
 North
America
 was the second largest
of
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 global
forestry
, it had the highest
timber
.
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 with,
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Africa
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 forest recorded 27% which was the highest as opposed to the other regions. North
America
 was the second highest with a figure of 25%. The other portions did not
showed
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 any significant changes. 18, 16 and 14% respectively for Europe,
Africa
 and Asia.
By contrast
, North
America
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 contribution
of
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timber
 stood at 30% which was the highest
timber
 recorded.
Although
it
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 contributions
was
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 not high in
the
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world
forestry
. South
Africa
 improved in
it
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timber
 contribution reaching 23% which was the second highest. Surprisingly,
Africa
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Africa's
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 shares of
timber
was
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 very poor. It had 9%,
nonetheless
, it was the highest continent with a huge forest.
Moreover
, Asia had 18%
while
 Europe had 20%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words forestry, africa, timber, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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