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The bar chart below shows the top ten counties for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten counties for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph shows the ten
coutries
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countries
 that produced and consumed the largest amounts of electricity in 2014.
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, China and the United States led in both electricity output and use. Generation exceeded consumption in all the countries except Germany. At 5,398 and 5,322
billion
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kWh
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, China generated and used more power than any of the other countries. The United States was the second-largest producer and consumer of power, at 4,099 and 3,866
billion
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kWh
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 respectively. Of the
others
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 eight countries, Russia was the only country whose output and consumption were over 1,000
billion
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kWh
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, at 1,057 and 1,038
billion
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kWh
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 respectively. In comparison, the corresponding figures for the Republic of Korea were only 485,1 and 449,5
billion
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kWh
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, making it the smallest electricity-producing and consuming country. In terms of Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, and Germany, their outputs ranged from 526 to 937
billion
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kWh
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 their usages ranged from 455 to 857
billion
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kWh
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. It is
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 noteworthy that Germany was the only country that used more power than it generated, at 582,5 and 526,6
billion
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kWh
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 respectively

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