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The bar chart below shows how frequently people in USA are in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The bar chart below shows how frequently people in USA are in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
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The given bar chart illustrates the information about
people
 in the USA who often visited fast
food
 restaurants in the
year
Fix the agreement mistake
years
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 from 2003 to 2013.
Overall
, it can be seen that the highest amount of customers
visiting
Wrong verb form
visit
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 outlets once a week or once or twice a month in a given period of time
while
 the very least amount of
people
 went every day and some never visited these restaurants.
To begin
, most of the customers are recorded once a week almost 35% in 2006 which is the highest and just above 30% in 2003
whereas
 in 2013 it is around 27% only.
However
,
people
 who ate fast
food
 in a month once or twice reached almost 35% in 2013
while
 only 25% of them went there in 2006.
However
, eating fast
food
 every day is comparatively very low throughout the years. In all years less than 5% of visitors encountered and
this
 is
same
Correct article usage
the same
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 as the number of
people
 who never went
any
Change preposition
to any
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 restaurant.
On the other hand
,
people
 who visited a few times a year
almost
Add a missing verb
were almost
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 the same around 15%
while
 eating fast
food
 several times a week
also
 the same amount in the years 2003 and 2013 but 20% of individuals went in 2006.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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