The bar chart below shows how frequently people in USA are in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
The given bar chart illustrates the information about
people
in the USA who often visited fast food
restaurants in the year
from 2003 to 2013.
Fix the agreement mistake
years
Overall
, it can be seen that the highest amount of customers visiting
outlets once a week or once or twice a month in a given period of time Wrong verb form
visit
while
the very least amount of people
went every day and some never visited these restaurants.
To begin
, most of the customers are recorded once a week almost 35% in 2006 which is the highest and just above 30% in 2003 whereas
in 2013 it is around 27% only. However
, people
who ate fast food
in a month once or twice reached almost 35% in 2013 while
only 25% of them went there in 2006.
However
, eating fast food
every day is comparatively very low throughout the years. In all years less than 5% of visitors encountered and this
is same
as the number of Correct article usage
the same
people
who never went any
restaurant. Change preposition
to any
On the other hand
, people
who visited a few times a year almost
the same around 15% Add a missing verb
were almost
while
eating fast food
several times a week also
the same amount in the years 2003 and 2013 but 20% of individuals went in 2006.Submitted by me.sara22 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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