Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, improving
sport
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sports
facilities
to train
younger athletes is as important as prodiving
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providing
a special
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special facilities
a special facility
facilities
for the top athletics training. thoungh
some argue that it is better to build special Correct your spelling
Although
facilities
to train
top athletes, i
will argue Change the capitalization
I
orderwise
.
Aging is one of the most constant Correct your spelling
otherwise
event
in human life. As time goes on the top athletics will Change to a plural noun
events
aged
and gets weak. By Change the verb form
age
be aged
then
, there will be a need for new and younger athletes. if there is
no sports Change the verb form
are
facilities
that are avialble
for Correct your spelling
available
the
society, who will the younger Correct article usage
apply
or
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apply
people
that are interested in athletic activities train
for them to get to realize they have the potentials
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potential
.
Another reason why states should provide Change the punctuation
?
sport facility
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sports facilities
that
is
available for every one use is the health Correct subject-verb agreement
are
benefit
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benefits
its
possess. As we all know, and Correct pronoun usage
they
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as recommed
recommed
by doctors our body Correct your spelling
recommended
recommend
need
some amount of Change the verb form
needs
excersise
to stay healthy. The presence of Correct your spelling
exercise
a
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sport facilities
a sport facility
sport
facilities
encourage
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encourages
people
to execersise
. And it Correct your spelling
exercise
also
make
older Change the verb form
makes
people
to
feel less lonely by going there to walk or jog around and chitchat with other older Change the verb form
apply
people
. For instance
, here in Turkey. There are sport
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sports
facilities
in all the parks that everyone have
access Change the verb form
has
and
the municipalities always encourage Change preposition
to and
people
to execersise
at the park in their leisure Correct your spelling
exercise
times
.
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time
Though
, there are disadvantage to having a Correct word choice
However
sport
facilities
that is
availabe
for everyone Correct your spelling
available
such
as; lack
of proper Correct article usage
the lack
mentainace
and over crowded of the area when Correct your spelling
maintenance
its
time for the top Correct your spelling
it's
atheletes
to Correct your spelling
athletes
train
, there with be privacy or space for them.
in conclusion, its
better for Correct your spelling
it's
goverments
to build Correct your spelling
governments
government
facilities
that every one
will have access to Replace the word
everyone
this
nuture
new Correct your spelling
nurture
talents
and increase healthy living.Fix the agreement mistake
talent
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