the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015

the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015
The chart gives some information about the rate of export in a particular country in five different items in
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various years. (2015 and 2016)
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, turning to the given bar chart, the highest level of export belonged to petroleum products and engineered goods is 20l5 and the
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following year,
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textiles had the lowest Figure for
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can be seen exporting, petroleum products ,engineered good and textiles increased in 2016 respectively 3%,8%,5%,15%
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and jewellery exporting decreased compared with the
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year(5.18%)
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • trend analysis
  • anomalies
  • percentage change
  • sector analysis
  • global demand
  • domestic production
  • economic conditions
  • technological advancements
  • international regulations
  • economic growth
  • trade relations
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