🔶Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. 🔸Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Advertisement
is one of the strategy marketing used by most of the company nowadays to attract both youth and
adulties
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adults
.
However
, many people believe that advertising
product
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products
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does not
give
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any impact to enhance their sales and end up being ignored by society.
This
essay will discuss
about
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these two different point
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of
views
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regard to
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the positive or the negative
ways
. First and foremost, there are so many
product
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products
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in
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the same quality in
this
era. In
this
crowded era, not many of us give our time to watch television or just to see the billboard
that is
hanging along the road. Our communities tend to buy familiar things rather than trying to buy something new. Regard to
this
, many companies have to find their own
ways
to introduce their brand in
a unique
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a unique way
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ways
. The key
of
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successful
advertisement
is to attract people by
give
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giving
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them a new-fresh idea.
For example
, involving the most famous artist nowadays in the project can catch
people
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people's
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attention to see the
advertisement
longer than just
make
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an
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apply
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ordinary videos that explain
about
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the
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things in boring
ways
. Unfortunately,
this
idea is a bit pricey and
maybe
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may
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take the company cost-flow.
Moreover
,
to attract
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attracting
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customers is
quiet
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quite
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challenging
hence
the company not only have to deliver information about their
product
but
also
trying
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to entertain the
costumers
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customers
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in order to get their attention. For me personally,
advertisement
is important to introduce
the
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new brand because there is no other
ways
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way
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to explain
about
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the
product
details.
Furthermore
, it is wiser to balance both the production cost and
advertisement
needing
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.
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Expand your main points with specific details and examples to support your arguments.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task and make sure to discuss both views and give your own opinion clearly.
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Work on constructing well-formulated sentences and organize ideas into coherent, logical paragraphs.
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Refine your use of vocabulary and aim to vary your sentence structure to improve readability and convey ideas more effectively.
task achievement
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • psychological tactics
  • emotional appeal
  • celebrity endorsements
  • social proof
  • brand awareness
  • brand loyalty
  • desensitized
  • ad fatigue
  • selective attention
  • ubiquity
  • targeted ads
  • personalization
  • consumer behavior
  • consumer awareness
  • advertising claims
  • societal values
  • effectiveness
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