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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and2016.The table shows the percetages change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and2016.The table shows the percetages change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
#value #country #exports #categories #percetages #change #category
The two layouts illustrate the current situation of
Norbition
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the Norbition
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 industrial area and its coming changes which may happen in the following years ,as
it
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apply
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can be seen in the maps,there is going to be a vast variation in
general
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the general
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 structure of
this
 zone in its future plan.
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 , the factories will be destroyed to make way for residential areas and it is supposed to build new districts throughout the site.
According to
 the future design
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the main road will be developed by adding a new square
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into
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to
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the map
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map
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the map
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 and Some streets will be constructed
along side
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alongside
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 the main road,
also
 the region will be
eqquiped
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equipped
 with new
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buildings
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building
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buildings
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such
 as
schoal
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school
schools
 and medical
center
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centre
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,
as well as
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a a
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a
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a a
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new bridge for connecting the central road to farmland will be
crented
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created
uto
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to
 prospective plan.
However
, the border of
town
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the town
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 and Farmland will
be remained
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remain
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 unchanged in future
develpment
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development
,
the
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and the
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 interior design of the industrial area will experience widespread alterations
lateron
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later on
.
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