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The graphs indicate the source of complaints about the Bank of America and the amount of time it takes to have the complaints resolved

The graphs indicate the source of complaints about the Bank of America and the amount of time it takes to have the complaints resolved
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The pie chart
illustrate
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 the rate of
compaints
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complaints
 about
the
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bank in America by the souring, namely public, insurance companies, media, government agencies,
out of state
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, bank employees and others;
whereas
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show
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 the time from
inverstigation
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investigation
 advice to
compaints
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complaints
 resolved.
Overall
,
this
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compaints
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complaints
 in public
is
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 most popular
then
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than
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 other
compaints
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complaints
companies
. By the same token, the time of the average time from investigation information data to action
deacline
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decline
 sharply from 2000 to 2004. Looking for more details, the
compaints
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complaints
at
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 public
is
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are
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higest
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higher
then
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than
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another
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 complaints at 63%.
However
, the other items of
compliants
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complaints
compliance
is
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 lowest at 2% ,
while
 the insurance companies
is
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 lowest at 8% by the same token. Regarding
to
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investigation data to final action, from 2000 to 2004 the
compliants
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complaints
compliance
 of average months went down sharply
at
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 6 to 5.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words compaints with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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