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There have been some problems with public transport in your area recently. Write a letter to the manager of the transport company. In your letter -describe the problems -explain how these problems are affecting the public -suggest some changes that could be made.

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Dear Manager, I am writing a displeasure note for transportation in my city. Since I moved to Multan I have been facing problems regarding your
bus
 services. I wait constantly for too much on stop and your
bus
 driver comes late.
However
, you have a fixed
time
 for each
bus
 within five minutes. If it doesn't come within the given
time
 it's a shame for your company. I have
also
 noticed another issue those drivers do not wait for passengers for six minutes they wait only a few seconds and they go to other stations. It is an unfortunate, situation for the passengers they cannot go on your
bus
. Many of them are going through these problems of not catching the
bus
 on
time
. They go late to their workplaces which has a bad impression on the employers. These people have faced yelling at their bosses and ruining them all day.
Furthermore
, some students cannot go to their schools on
time
 and their teachers punish them by staying ten minutes at the main gate.
This
 is an alarming situation in my hometown which you will have to rectify immediately. I would like to tell you a few things to cope with
this
 issue. You can strict compliance of buses
time
 so we could go on
time
.
Therefore
, it can solve our problem and we cannot wait for too much. I hope that you will consider my suggestion and improve your system. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely,
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Logical Structure
Ensure that your letter has a clear logical structure with an appropriate opening and closing. Use paragraphs effectively to separate different points.
Greeting and Closing
Start your letter with a formal greeting and end with a suitable closing. Consider using phrases like 'Dear Sir or Madam' and 'Yours faithfully,' when the recipient's name is unknown.
Single Idea per Paragraph
Organize your letter so that one idea is presented and developed within each paragraph. Use topic sentences to lead your paragraphs.
Complete Response
To fully address the task, you need to describe the problems with public transport in detail, explain how they affect the public, and suggest specific changes. Make sure each part of the prompt is covered comprehensively.
Suitable Writing Tone
The tone of your letter should be formal and polite. It is important to express your concerns clearly without sounding too casual or informal. Avoid informal language and maintain a respectful tone throughout your letter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plaguing
  • delays
  • frustration
  • inconvenience
  • productivity
  • rely on
  • daily commute
  • overall
  • condition
  • deteriorated
  • overcrowded
  • seating arrangements
  • compromises
  • safety
  • comfort
  • impacts
  • hygienic
  • maintenance
  • unpleasant
  • alternative
  • modes of transportation
  • congestion
  • pollution
  • fuel consumption
  • proposed
  • infrastructure
  • upgrading
  • expanding
  • cater to
  • growing population
  • focus on
  • regular maintenance
  • breakdowns
  • hire
  • train
  • customer service
  • overcrowding
  • expectations
  • managing
  • minimizing
  • appropriate action
  • reliable
  • efficient
  • sustainable
  • benefits
  • entire community
  • Thank you for your attention to this matter.
  • Yours faithfully
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