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The pictures show information about average incone and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK

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The given table portrays
about
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average wages and expenditure on
food
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 and clothes,
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 the pie chart illustrates
percentage
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 of detail items of the outgoings by a mediocre family in a city in the United Kingdom in two different years, 2010 and 2013.
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, the average salary had
decrease
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 in the
last
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 period,
whereas
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 the trend in spending was in reverse.
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, there were several
changing
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 in each
items
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 of a family’s spending, but the figure remained stable only in
other
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another food category
other food categories
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food
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 category
among
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 the years. As it is presented in the table, a moderate family’s earnings were 29000 in 2010, but that amount dropped to 25000 in 2013.
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 income
was
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declined, the costs
on
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of
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food
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 and clothes by a family experienced to rise, from 14000 to 15000. In terms of
spending’s
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spending
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 category, the rates in fruit and vegetables and dairy products had risen 4% in 2013 to 30% and 16%, respectively. Meat and fish, which was the most purchased in 2010, had considerably
reduce
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 from 29% to 23% in 2013, and dairy products went down to 13% in the
last
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 period. Meanwhile, it is apparent that the category in other
food
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 remained unchanged over the periods (18%).
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