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The maps below show the changes in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the changes in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram
illustrate
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 how
town
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the town
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 changed after some developments over a period
20
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- years.
Overall
, the town has
been
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seen
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 significant development in terms of river,
ancient
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and ancient
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structure
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structures
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.
This
 can
be see
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, it was the North the forest
is
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was
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cut-down
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cut down
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 and cleared to make way for mountains. In the
South
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South,
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 the mountain was
cut-down
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cut down
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 all.
Bottom
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 of
mountains
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the mountains
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, the Ancient structure is cleared and the river
shorten
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shortened
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 the length and relocated to
South
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the South
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 is replaced by Lake.
Beside
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 that, in the
East
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 the Villages was converted into Hotel. In the meantime, the Lake is directly opposite
Hydroelectronic
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the Hydroelectronic
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 dam after
Irrigated
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the Irrigated
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 farmlands
was
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 demolished. In the
West
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 the Rare plants and animals
was
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were
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 knocked down. At that point, in the South
East
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East,
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 the Villages
was
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were
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 reopened and in the
South
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South,
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 the
Electricty
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electricity
 was constructed. At
last
, the river after
relocated
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being relocated
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the
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 South was parallel and surrounded
to
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by
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Electricitys
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electricity
.
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