The bar chart below shows the number of new motorcycles sold by Harley Davidson and BMW between 2010 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of new motorcycles sold by Harley Davidson and BMW between 2010 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the total of new motorcycles that
been
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sold by Harley
Davidso
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Davidson
and
BMW
in ten years from 2010 to 2020. In
genereal
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general
, it can be seen that there are 2 trends, Harley
Davidso
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Davidson
showed
an
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downward trend meanwhile
BMW
experienced an upward trend. Star with Harley Davidson (
HD
) in 2010 reached
the
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a
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higher
number
above 180,000 and descended the next eight years
at
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to
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100,000 in 2020.
At
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the opposite,
BMW
started above 80,000 in 2010 and
rise
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rose
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gradually from 2012 to 2020, under 100,000 and at 140,000, respectively. In 2018, the
sell
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cell
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number
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numbers
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in
HD
and
BMW
were
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was
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slightly different about 120,000. Meanwhile, even
the
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though the
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trends showed that
HD
experienced
fall
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a fall
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but
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apply
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the total
number
still
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was still
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more than
BMW
, the
higher
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highest
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points
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point
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in
BMW
was in 2020
ata
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at
140,000 same as the
number
HD
reached in 2016, and the small
number
of
BMW
sealed was 100,000, just two time less with the higher
number
of
BMW
sealed.
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