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The bar chart below shows the number of new motorcycles sold by Harley Davidson and BMW between 2010 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of new motorcycles sold by Harley Davidson and BMW between 2010 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the total of new motorcycles that
been
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have been
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 sold by Harley
Davidso
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Davidson
 and
BMW
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 in ten years from 2010 to 2020. In
genereal
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general
, it can be seen that there are 2 trends, Harley
Davidso
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Davidson
 showed
an
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 downward trend meanwhile
BMW
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 experienced an upward trend. Star with Harley Davidson (
HD
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) in 2010 reached
the
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 higher
number
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 above 180,000 and descended the next eight years
at
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 100,000 in 2020.
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 the opposite,
BMW
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 started above 80,000 in 2010 and
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 gradually from 2012 to 2020, under 100,000 and at 140,000, respectively. In 2018, the
sell
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cell
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number
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numbers
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 in
HD
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 and
BMW
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were
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 slightly different about 120,000. Meanwhile, even
the
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though the
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 trends showed that
HD
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 experienced
fall
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a fall
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but
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apply
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the total
number
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still
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was still
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 more than
BMW
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, the
higher
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highest
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points
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point
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 in
BMW
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 was in 2020
ata
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at
 140,000 same as the
number
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HD
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 reached in 2016, and the small
number
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 of
BMW
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 sealed was 100,000, just two time less with the higher
number
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 of
BMW
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 sealed.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bmw, hd, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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