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some expert believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than at secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#expert #children #language #school #outweigh
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Learning a second
language
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 has become a common practice in almost all parts of the world.
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, there has
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 debate about
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 time when pupils should start learning it.
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,
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studying
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a new
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language
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 has some drawbacks, I believe that they are outweighed by several benefits. To
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begin
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language
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 at the beginning of education.
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, children have a
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 memory
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than adults,
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, becoming
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 is
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easier.
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, some people nowadays forget everything
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 not related to their work, but they have the ability not to forget what they studied in elementary
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, pupils have only 2 or 3 subjects at primary
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 which
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 significant time
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studing
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studying
 other languages.
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, it helps them to train
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their brain
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 early age and improve
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 capacity
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 memorising.
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, one of the
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 of
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 learn
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a language
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 for
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the young
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 generation is
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 of feeling
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 childhood. All children want to play games with their peers outside and more attention from parents.
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, parents think only about their future,
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 system of education which does not
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 pupils have
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 leisure time. Because parents require
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their children
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 smart rather than others and
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older people have their own competition.
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, there
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some
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conflict
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 amongst experts about
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 of
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language
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 for
education
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the education
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 system at primary
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 rather than at middle
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. I think that learning
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 at elementary
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 more benefits and they outweigh
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the negative
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 sides.
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