The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps
illustrates
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,
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the Norbiton
norbiton
industrial
area
for
a
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present day and future development.
Overall
, the development
planned
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Clearly shows the
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innovation
inovation
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innovation
in the roads and service building which added in the
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future
futer
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future
plan
were located in the east of
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Norbiton
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norbiton
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indestrial
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industrial
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area
erea
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area
i The first
plan
shown
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present
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the present
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structure which
the
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norbiton
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industrial
area
located on
east
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the east
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side
of the fiver and the farmland on the north
Side
.
Wshich
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all factories
srounded
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surrounded
rounded
sounded
the roundabout and the roads.
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,
in
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the
developmed
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development
developed
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more facilities
such
as
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medical
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Center,
Scharland
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and Scharland
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Ploffraund
as well as
located on the east of the
plan
. Despite
this
shops are constructed
in
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the opposite
side
of
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center,
were
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where
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another road will
build
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on the south
side
of the
area
.
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, they add
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an extintion
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extintion
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extension
brag in de
fermland
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farmland
area
to serve the people who will
leve
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their
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in the north.
In addition
, the housing will spread around
norbiton
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Norbiton
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industrial
are
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in the future
plan
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words norbiton, area, plan, side with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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