Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, While some people think it is bad. discuss both views and state your opinion.
Some people consider
countries
to benefit from hosting international events
while
other people believe it is not good. In my opinion, I Totally agree that hosting global sports events
is a good decision for some countries
because it can help their development but we have to be aware of the impact of it.
One of the ways some countries
can develop is by hosting global events
like the FIFA World Cup, ASIAN Games and others. International events
will attract many countries
to join the event and it is said to be interesting for some countries
. With the
international Correct article usage
apply
Fix the agreement mistake
events
event
some Add a comma
event,
countries
can promote their culture, food, tourists
attractions and others and it can benefit their country. Change the noun form
tourist
For instance
, In 2022 Indonesia was chosen as a host ASIAN
GAMES and Change preposition
of ASIAN
government
prepared their Correct article usage
the government
countries
not only facilities about
sports but prepared Change preposition
for
about
famous tourist Change preposition
for
attraction
, traditional food and traditional culture in order Fix the agreement mistake
attractions
other
Change preposition
for other
countries
come
and visit Indonesia can Fix the infinitive
to come
enjoyed
Change the verb form
be enjoyed
Correct pronoun usage
it with
with
all Change preposition
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
variety
in Indonesia. Add an article
the variety
Government
realized that their Add an article
The government
countries
can
profit from their local income.
Wrong verb form
could
While
,
some Remove the comma
apply
countries
have to be aware of the consequences of hosting global events
which may expose their countries
and central issues in their countries
. For Example
, in 2023 India
was chosen as
host Change preposition
to
Asian
Correct article usage
the Asian
games
, because of that international media interest Capitalize word
Games
to get
information about Change preposition
in getting
India
. International media was exposed about
positive issues in Change preposition
to
India
but they also
published about negative issues in India
such
as poverty which was a problem in internal India
.
To sum up
, It is a good idea to host international sporting events
but some countries
have to be aware of the effect of that event.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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