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You are going to have a family party in a private room in a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter, say: ● why you need to use this private room ● what you need them to provide for the party ● inquire about the price of the food you are ordering

#party #room #hotel #manager #price #food
Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to ask about the private
room
 facilities for
party
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the party
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 in your
hotel
. I am a huge fan of your
five star
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hotel
 with the best view of
makkah
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Makkah
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 in your
room
's windows. My sister always wanted to have a nikkah ceremony in
makkah
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Makkah
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 with its most beautiful view. I just want a simple ceremony in your
hotel
's private
room
 with minimal white
flowers
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 decoration. Almost 20 people will attend the ceremony and we will be pleased if your
hotel
 will respect our family's privacy and arrange some large private
room
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rooms
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.
Moreover
, my
guest
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guests
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 like continental food. Could you please provide me
detailed
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with detailed
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 prices of your continental food? I will decide
the
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on the
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 menu after getting the price details. I would be happy if you respond
me
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 as early as possible. I look forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, XYZ
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Task Achievement
Make sure all questions are thoroughly answered in your letter, including the reason for using the private room, the specific requests for the party, and an explicit inquiry about food prices.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider organizing your paragraphs more clearly by introducing the topic sentence at the beginning. Each paragraph should contain a single idea that is fully developed.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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