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The pictures illustrate the changes in Shipsmouth between 1995 and 2010.

#pictures #changes #shipsmouth
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presents
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 the alterations in
Ships
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the ship's
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 mouth, over a fifteen-year period between 1995 and 2010.
Overall
, Ships
mouth
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 in 1995 was a less urbanized area with some notable trees.
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, in 2010 city
had
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witnessed a lot of developments
especially
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 with more facilities. As can be seen in the map the trees from 1995
in
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 2010 were cut off,
where
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in
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on
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the north-west
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north-west
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northwest
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 side of
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the tress
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tress
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trees
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 in 2010
was
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were
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 constructed
flats
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 blocks,
also
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and also
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in
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on
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the south-side
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south-side
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was
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 built
airport
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the airport
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. There were
few
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 rebuilt processes
such
 as
factory
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a factory
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 that was in
south
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the south
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 of
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the trees
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trees
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 in 1995 which was rebuilt into
shopping
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a shopping
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 centre in 2010,
also
 there was a church which was reconstructed into a pub as well. As shown in the illustration,
that
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in
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city
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the city
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 centre was
road
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the road
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 for cars in 1995 which was changed
for
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track
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 for pedestrians only in 2010. In
south
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the south
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 of
city
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the city
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 centre was built up
newly
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station which
is continuing
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of
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 the station which was
in
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south of the map.
Furthermore
, the football stadium was built
up in
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east
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the east
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 side of
lake
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the lake
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 in 2010,
moreover
, there was
demonization
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in
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on
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 the east side of the map of
1995
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the 1995
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 Ships mouth which was reconstructed into a modern skyscraper.
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coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical structure of your essay by organizing it into well-defined paragraphs. Introduction, body, and conclusion should be evident, with each body paragraph focusing on a specific change. This will make your essay easier to follow.
coherence cohesion
Include a clear introduction and conclusion. Your introduction should set the scene for what the essay will discuss, and your conclusion should summarise the key points and clearly state any implications or final thoughts.
coherence cohesion
Your main points need to be more fully supported with specific details that are relevant to the task. When you mention changes, try to include information about the significance of these changes or how they impact the overall layout of Shipsmouth.
task achievement
Ensure that you address all parts of the task. In the essay, make sure each feature that has changed from 1995 to 2010 is mentioned and described in some detail.
task achievement
Aim for clearer and more comprehensive ideas. Your essay should elaborate on points with clarity and depth, demonstrating a complete understanding of the changes presented in the maps.
task achievement
While you have included relevant examples, make sure they are specific and accurately linked to the provided maps. Pay close attention to the details in the images when describing the features and changes.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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