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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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years ago.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the only thing which did not change is the location of
entrance
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the entrance
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.
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Additionally
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 tables and chairs have
removed
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been removed
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 from the
central
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centre
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 of the
library
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, and
information
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an information
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 desk has been added at the east of the
library
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 with self-service machines. In detail, looking more closely at the
north-west
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northwest
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 of the
library
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,
while
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 today
this
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 corner is
using
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used
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 for storytelling events and containing children’s fiction books, in the beginning of the
perios
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period
periods
this
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 area
used
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is used
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 for
Cd’s
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CDs
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, videos and computer games. Next
of
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in
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this
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 area, which
is
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apply
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containig
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contains
 all reference
book
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books
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, adult fiction books were placed. Another change has occurred in the
South-west
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Southwest
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 part of the
library
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, a replacement of
reading
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the reading
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 room with a computer room. Looking more closely at the east part of the
library
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, the
northest
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most north
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 part,
where
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which
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 were used for children’s book
in
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apply
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20 years ago is today
utilizing
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utilised
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 for lecture room. By means of a
door
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door,
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 there is an area which consists of adult
ficition
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fiction
 books,
information
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an information
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 desk and self-service machines has been added at the east
with in
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within
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 the
last
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 20 years.
Moreover
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, a
cafee
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cafe
 has been constructed on the right side of the entrance,
where
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which
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were
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was
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 used as
a
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an
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 enquiry desk in the past
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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