The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The graph and table below illustrate the mean monthly temperatures in degrees

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and the mean annual hours of sunshine respectively in London, New York and

Sydney

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, it seems that there is no significant correlation between the time

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apply

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an area

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exposed to the Sun and the reading on

thermometer

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the thermometer

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. The most hours of sunshine is experienced by New York, which is 2,535.

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, that location is not

hottest

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the hottest

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overall

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as the highest temperature is recorded between May and September,

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period of only 5 months long. Meanwhile, London, despite having significantly less time experiencing sunlight (1,180), is warmer than New York between December and March.

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, the New Yorkers undergo the highest peak temperature of about 30 degrees. The hottest megapolis out of these three is certainly

Sydney

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. The thermometer reading fluctuates in

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the 15

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-25 degrees

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range and is the highest during the rest of the year. Interestingly, when it is the warmest in Australia, it is the coldest in

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the UK

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and USA. The peak reading in

Sydney

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, which is just above 25, was recorded in January. In spite of being the warmest place out of three,

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receives sunlight in

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smaller period, than its American counterpart.

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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

average monthly temperature
temperature fluctuations
range
significant differences
average number of hours of sunshine per year
highlight
relate
patterns
comparisons
major cities

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