The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries
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The percentage of people 65 and older in three distinct countries between 1940 and 2040 is depicted in the graph below. It is evident that between 1940 and 2040, the percentage of elderly persons
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in every nation. The country with the most anticipated changes in its older population is Japan. Approximately 9% of Americans were 65
years
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of age or older in 1940, compared to approximately 7% of Swedish and 5% of Japanese individuals. Over the next fifty
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, the proportion of elderly people increased gradually in both the USA and Sweden, reaching slightly under 15% in 1990.
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, until the early 2000s, Japan's statistics were below 5%. Future projections show that Japan's proportion of the elderly will suddenly rise, rising by more than 15% in just ten
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, from 2030 to 2040.
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projections, 27% of Japanese people will be 65
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of age or older by 2040;
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, similar percentages are predicted for Sweden and the USA, at roughly 25% and 23%, respectively.
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